charlie8575 Posted January 29, 2013 Share Posted January 29, 2013 That's looking really good, Mike. I like the plot turn, too. Good writing. Charlie Larkin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mrmike Posted February 2, 2013 Author Share Posted February 2, 2013 Thank you David, John, and Charlie! Charlie, not all stories run the straight and narrow path. It's more interesting with a few twists and turns...like riding a motorcycle. It fun to feel the speed in a straight line, but it gets exciting when you get into the turns! The Story The following morning, McNally meets with Det. Sgt. Troy at the Boston Police Impound Garage to look over the Caddy again as they both feel as they have missed something, and for all they know, it is staring at them in the face. After an hour of looking over the car again, they stop and discuss what they both have and wonder what they are missing. McNally leans against the right tail fin of the Caddy and he feels the taillight assembly move slightly. He asks Adam if the taillights were removed and Adam looks at the CSU tech who says no as McNally looks at the taillight and sees fresh screwdriver marks on the screws holding the assembly on. The tech produces a screwdriver, removes the taillight from the tail fin, looks inside and points at a plastic pouch covered with dust and dirt. The pouch is removed and its contents spread out on a workbench...stock certificates from Walter's company and probably worth hundreds of thousands of dollars. They have found the motive for Mary Parregrin and James Dullone's murder...money! The Build The Caddy is almost finished. Here's a sneak peek at where I am at now. McNally Will Return... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LAone Posted February 2, 2013 Share Posted February 2, 2013 (edited) It's been a while for me to read one of your stories. Great reading as always. The caddy looks sweet. I dig the color Edited February 2, 2013 by LAone Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mrmike Posted February 3, 2013 Author Share Posted February 3, 2013 Thanks Luis! The Story McNally cell phone rings with a call from Mrs. Crane, Mary Parregrin's neighbor. She tells him someone is breaking into Mary's house and he and Sgt. Adam Troy race over to Mary's house followed by a patrol car with two patrolmen. The patrolmen will cover the back of the house while Adam goes in through the front door and McNally goes in through the side door into the kitchen. As he walks through the kitchen he is hit across the shoulders with a heavy object that knocks him to the floor and he turns to see a figure running away out the side door. He get himself up and running, yelling for Adam as he runs out the door after the figure. The figure runs past the corner of the house and trips over the garden hose and nearly falls to the ground with McNally tackling the figure, grabbing the figures arm and twisting it behind its back. Adam comes running over and hands McNally a pair of handcuffs which McNally expertly cuffs the figure. He turns the figure onto their side and is identified as Derek Parregrin. He is arrested for the murders of Mary Parregrin and James Dullone and placed into the patrol car for the ride to BPD. Several weeks later, McNally receives a compensation check from the Parregrin's lawyer for apprehending Mary's killer which will go in part to taking his girlfriend Caitlyn out to dinner since he has been blowing her off due to work. The DA's office decides to release the Caddy to Wayne, the collector from Connecticut and McNally offers to deliver the car using the flat bed wrecker from his friend Vic. Upon arriving at Wayne's showroom, he is greeted by Wayne who is extremely happy to see the Caddy and he thanks McNally for delivering the car. He offers McNally an opportunity to take the AC Cobra that McNally previously saw out for a spin, which McNally quickly agrees to. Both men are smiling ear to ear! The Build I have finished my '59 Cadillac it is posted in Under Glass. I would like to thank all those who took the time to view and to comment on my WIP. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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